Those of a disposition that (quite rightly) renders them pissed-off with maudlin self-pity and gratuitous self indulgence of the 'woe is me kind', please look away now.
I tried,I really tried to do uplifting, or happy, or beautiful but as soon as I looked at the myriad poetry skies of opportunity they turned black and it pissed down. Three times I tried and failed.I even tried using my imagination but that's like using a bottle opener to bake bread.
Anyways IT'S POETRY BUS TIME!! And there will be nicer and better poems by other passengers
HERE
And If YOU haven't already done so BUY THE POETRY BUS MAG it's bloody brilliant and stocks are running low.
Here's my tickets for Enchanted Oaks bus. Don't read them all, just browse and put something vague in the comments, in fact don't read any of them, go and do something more interesting. Or visit the other passengers.
I am
Broken.
Not fragile,
what doesn’t kill you,
makes you die a little each time.
Sheltered but homeless.
Worthless.
The entirety of my experience.
Not the worst person I could be.
Rich enough to break no law,
Poor enough
To appreciate it.
Wise enough
to know the luxury
of choice.
Lacking in confidence.
Suspicious of certainty.
Unforgiving.
In forgiveness.
Able to cry
At the drop of a hat
But not the dropping
Of a bomb
A husband.
A Father.
A Son.
A Brother.
Unqualified.
Running out,
but not out,
of time
A dreamer still.
A survivor so far.
A rebel by answer.
Inadequate by question.
My own best friend.
And worse enemy.
Angry, bitter, twisted,
fearful, hopeful, desperate,
vicious, cruel, unkind,
kind ,gentle, loving.
A new song everyday.
I was
A child.
Unsure.
Unsteady.
Forever young.
Unsung.
Unready.
Unable.
Wasted.
I will be
Someone.
Something.
Someday.
So what
If not ?
(I told you not to read!But look here, if you must, I even started with a happy title, it didn't work.!)
Beautiful Day.
On a day like this,
Snowed-in .
Music floated snowflake-light
Bathed low in winter sun
nurtured warmth, held only love
This big world bright,
shiny-faced skittered
seeds on thawed darkest soil
They painted the blank canvas
And I spattered blood
Crimson cries to earthly hell
Became what I feared
Broke bones like promises
Heard the strings the chorus
My hardened heart a fist
I could kill, I nearly did
this haunts me now
Broken ghosts remember shadows
Seeking the light where I try to shine.
(And this one!! I actually really like our town!)
Our Town
This is the peaceful town
talking up the strangers hand
local garbage round the back
The rats know the craic
Christmas lights line the way
Twinkle tears for
Madtroplis hell
This your day
This our town
Feet grind the pavements
Jaws drop the goss
Dish the dirt
Dirty laundry in public spaces
Dirty dishes in the sink
From last nights Indian
Drizzling rains grease the streets
Greasy tea greasy tills
In the cafes of the lost the lonely
Darkness comes early
To our town
28 comments:
I have to say that you do misery VERY well. I liked all three of these because they're honest. Even those of us who are a bit of a Pollyanna can relate.
what doesn’t kill you,
makes you die a little each time
A new song everyday.
This big world bright,
shiny-faced skittered
seeds on thawed darkest soil
Broken ghosts remember shadows
Seeking the light where I try to shine.
In the cafes of the lost the lonely
Darkness comes early
To our town
Beautiful lines. Nicer, better? Only one TFE.
I want to crack a joke about poets and lightbulbs but I won't.
Angst. The poet's best friend. You're good at whaling away at life. I can't imagine you trumpeting on about how wonderful everything is! like Walt Whitman. You have Peadar's voice.
I don't know what that sad thing at the bottom of everything is, but I have it too. On a perfectly pretty day in my perfectly pretty house in my perfectly pretty town, with my perfectly wonderful spouse and our lovely pets and on and on, I can write a woe poem like THAT. It actually takes me some effort to put a little hope in some of my things.
I think you're liked the way you are.
I don't get the middle poem's situation, but I get its explosion. The town poem is nice and menacing. And the first one covers all the bases of a complicated man. Good work.
Ah, lovely, lovely woe and misery and despair and unrelenting gloom. Nobody does it quite like you TFE.
TFE - I loved them all! I AM the most becuase it was raw, truthful and unassuming.
OUR TOWN - perhaps one shoould read it as Every Town - this is where I live!
I really enjoy reading your work you have a grit, a reality, but also a gentleness of touch and expression that reaches out. What you consider to be unworthy I find awesome and wish that I could turn words and bend sentences to my will in the same way that you do.
Some of us are just not very good at looking in mirrors - it ties us in knots! I like your 'Beautiful Day' though.
x
The last two lines of the second one are actually full of hope.
and anyway all the best poems are miserable - didn't you know?
I loved these! Of course I am a child of woe myself, so why wouldn't I? But seriously, they are raw and they are you, nobody here can ask for more than that. There is a WWII acronym you likely know: FUBAR. Henceforth in my mind it will ever be "Fecked up beyond all recognition." So glad to know you, TFE, and I'm game to wallow in the mire with you anytime.
Broken, worthless, but not the worst person you could be. That in itself is telling. A dreamer still. That alone may be enough.
The second poem does the job particularly well for me, but all your words are spot on. dwelling dark and deep is a true poets way isn't it?... never heard of a perfectly content and fuzzy warm great poet.. shine on my friend!
;-)
You are not afraid to look life's grim bits in the face Peadar. I can relate more easily to Nos.1 and 3, probably because I do turn away (or try to) from those grim bits. Three great poems here - you should be proud of yourself.
I think I've figured out the problem here; it must be "last night's Indian". It had to have been off and you can't tell through the Vindaloo, can you?
Seriously, thank God you're a poet, Peadar. Catharsis is your saving grace, I believe.
Kat
I've a poem more full of angst and suicidal tendencies than even that. I wrote it long ago when deep in the Doldrums and I keep looking at it, wondering if I should post it.
None of which helps you, of course. You are where many an ultimately successful artist or poet has been. Keep knocking pal, you have the talent, eventually some lazy sod will stir himself and open the bloody door.
Hi TFE, don't know if you received my comment yesterday, or maybe "it didn't meet the blog owner's approval." Anyway, I said something to the effect that you are a true Irish poet!
There was something about the wv, but nothing works with today's wv, so I'll just leave it at that.
Ciao!
I am the most miserable bollix that ever lived Bug!
Only one TFE, Titus? THank feck for that!
But thanks.
Kind words Chris,really, thank you.
Is that a good thing or a bad thing Pete!? ;)
Bloody hell more kind words! THat's so nice Gwei Mui, Thank you!!
Mirrors? AAAAaargghhh! THanks FOx.
I think that might just be the heart of the matter, Nibby, even if it is or isn't true!
Thanks Carolina Linthead, more kind words!!And I'm liking the FUBAR, i shall be adopting that one!
Beautifully put Karen even your comments are like poetry!
GO WATHERFURDKATEENZ!!!
Lifes grim bits , Heather? I'm looking in that mirror again, Am I?
THanks you crafty lady you!
LOve Curry Kato, not had one for ages though!
Thanks!
THanks Dave, when can we see this poem of yours, I'm intrigued??!!
THanks JeannE! (Didn't get the other comment, must be the gremlins!)
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