tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post8527216225042162271..comments2023-09-24T13:42:26.769+01:00Comments on Yes it's TOTALFECKINEEJIT: Swiss Poetry BusTotalfeckineejithttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-51899576116983584932010-04-06T11:10:06.893+01:002010-04-06T11:10:06.893+01:00This is really good - it took a few reads for me, ...This is really good - it took a few reads for me, but today it's crystal clear. I love that line 'too young for wisdom June flamed.' Really nice.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-90219601364027267812010-04-05T20:24:26.676+01:002010-04-05T20:24:26.676+01:00Love your poem - it was my favourite picture but t...Love your poem - it was my favourite picture but this week my mind is not in gear somehow and I couldn't think what to write. I have written a poor effort but cannot tell Swiss because I can't see how to leave a comment on his blog.<br />Hope your computer is behaving better now. It has certainly replicated those heads in your header!The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-1631470870928517202010-04-05T19:48:10.283+01:002010-04-05T19:48:10.283+01:00Where was this sun in June? Not Wicklow, that'...Where was this sun in June? Not Wicklow, that's for sure.<br />Some great images here - particularly liked the paper thin thoughts (my kinda thoughts!)Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-65893786316206365082010-04-05T19:11:55.369+01:002010-04-05T19:11:55.369+01:00A step nearer indeed! Great stuff as usual, Eej a...A step nearer indeed! Great stuff as usual, Eej and here's myself struggling with an empty head today.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-36552507619765553052010-04-05T16:33:54.133+01:002010-04-05T16:33:54.133+01:00Nice one, Peadar! I loved "the Winter of ours...Nice one, Peadar! I loved "the Winter of ourselves" bit particularly.<br /><br />KatKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-83813771375657031262010-04-05T12:09:06.309+01:002010-04-05T12:09:06.309+01:00This is great, I like the thoughts being paper thi...This is great, I like the thoughts being paper thin, and being too young for wisdom.Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-88752783910983096032010-04-05T11:41:25.652+01:002010-04-05T11:41:25.652+01:00" thoughts
Paper thin, parched
Skin tight as ..." thoughts<br />Paper thin, parched<br />Skin tight as a drum held us inside<br />The empty carapace of ourselves<br />Too young for wisdom June flamed"<br /><br />loved this bit. Beautiful writing all over.. this is like a prequel to the easter poem...Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-68207648911467301852010-04-05T09:44:25.448+01:002010-04-05T09:44:25.448+01:00Oh, this is as tight as that skin.
Intense, moving...Oh, this is as tight as that skin.<br />Intense, moving, intelligent. It's like the bones of the emotion.<br />I really liked it.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-57639936446958769862010-04-05T09:29:23.458+01:002010-04-05T09:29:23.458+01:00quiet and poignant. such a contrast with the anger...quiet and poignant. such a contrast with the anger of the Easter poem.<br />thanks for sharing<br />cfmAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-32272745531694434252010-04-05T08:20:21.771+01:002010-04-05T08:20:21.771+01:00a gamut of images! i love monsoona gamut of images! i love monsoonswisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-75772620088289905092010-04-05T03:43:59.881+01:002010-04-05T03:43:59.881+01:00This photo elicits pensive and inquisitive qualiti...This photo elicits pensive and inquisitive qualities, and TFE, you capture those beautifully in your description of naiveté here in my favorite lines: 'we basked in the light, thoughts/Paper thin, parched/Skin tight as a drum held us inside/The empty carapace of ourselves.' I like the use of the words 'parch' and 'paper thin', bringing to mind parchment and that sense of time.Dr. Jeanne Irishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11277286531162894465noreply@blogger.com