tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post6086545160471298238..comments2023-09-24T13:42:26.769+01:00Comments on Yes it's TOTALFECKINEEJIT: It's the wrong trousers!Totalfeckineejithttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-64977673500194504882011-04-11T06:15:05.966+01:002011-04-11T06:15:05.966+01:00Dire views have inspired many fine poems. And you ...Dire views have inspired many fine poems. And you were inspired in this stanza particularly:<br />These pistols of dawn<br />their rising panic of<br />another day<br />laid out before them<br />like a swaddled corpse<br /><br />Your last one is a winner too. It's a lighter version of your world view, funny, clever, your voice is so strong...Enchanted Oakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14815997287116818456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-59397876342989839052011-04-07T14:43:13.975+01:002011-04-07T14:43:13.975+01:00That first piece is a cracker. More a clanger, may...That first piece is a cracker. More a clanger, maybe. A roughshod, flopsweat, clattery dogtrap start into the terrors of a new day. Which, hopefully, never turns out to be quite as feared. Hang tight, Compañero.Padhraig Nolanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11010869074911253314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-42906785869026261122011-04-06T18:59:32.222+01:002011-04-06T18:59:32.222+01:00An amazing menagerie of wit and play on words. You...An amazing menagerie of wit and play on words. Your first verse had me as edgy as a cat on a hot tin roof!MuseSwingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11999288873532715380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-85350076281622189672011-04-06T16:04:58.809+01:002011-04-06T16:04:58.809+01:00That straightened narrow - so confining. rubs our ...That straightened narrow - so confining. rubs our elbows and other sticking-out parts raw. Grind those gears and head cross-country!<br /><br />If you need a driver for April 18 &/or 25, I could do that.NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-18131581865681779742011-04-06T13:15:09.891+01:002011-04-06T13:15:09.891+01:00ok - so i love the poem, and i love Down In The Tu...ok - so i love the poem, and i love Down In The Tubestation At Midnight - especially that bass line!<br /><br />everyone should own an album by The JamDon't Feed The Pixieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05380146661526476947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-60909977336829349062011-04-05T21:30:28.551+01:002011-04-05T21:30:28.551+01:00Sorry you're with the black dogs at the moment...Sorry you're with the black dogs at the moment. Go ride an elephant.Emerging Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06539530495238043923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-19760186103566255342011-04-05T18:16:46.728+01:002011-04-05T18:16:46.728+01:00Only 6.5 weeks to go!!
all's going very well...Only 6.5 weeks to go!! <br /><br />all's going very well luckily... fingers crossed it'll keep going that way...Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-86966109485210657662011-04-05T17:41:05.770+01:002011-04-05T17:41:05.770+01:00liking both of these for every different reasons. ...liking both of these for every different reasons. i think the second one is the one i'm drawn to at first sight but the first is the one i'd prefer in timeswisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-1071236737971658462011-04-05T16:28:17.348+01:002011-04-05T16:28:17.348+01:00Wow that first one struck a little close to home -...Wow that first one struck a little close to home - I'm not sure why, but some days that's my song entirely. <br /><br />Love the second one - we're all a part of the animal kingdom after all.The Bughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07509037206264761261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-47788600825976227432011-04-05T16:20:06.049+01:002011-04-05T16:20:06.049+01:00Couple of good ones here Peadar. I do so hope tha...Couple of good ones here Peadar. I do so hope that Spring cheers you up a lot.<br />Have written my first poem on my blog since I was ill - that has cheered me up as I realise that maybe after all my creative urge has not died.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-15461299610620629102011-04-05T15:43:28.914+01:002011-04-05T15:43:28.914+01:00love the animalpoem, all the cellulite and combust...love the animalpoem, all the cellulite and combustion. we take all animal aspects for ourselves: they serve to define our moods.NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-61384109990167151042011-04-05T12:48:13.950+01:002011-04-05T12:48:13.950+01:00What hath darkness wrought? Fear not, my friend, y...What hath darkness wrought? Fear not, my friend, you will conquer it!<br /><br />Ah! Pure genius! Your brilliance really emerges with the Poetry Bus one - using analogies the whole way through. Really, really good!<br /><br />Phrases like, "who never let the hare sit" and<br />"all cellulite and combustion" - <br /><br />unmistakably YOUR work! Isn't it grand to have a voice that is recognizable as only your own? <br />My prediction is this: You will rise from the pit, Peadar - come Easter Sunday.<br /><br />KatKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-3312343513454636672011-04-05T12:13:38.663+01:002011-04-05T12:13:38.663+01:00Both poems are wonderful and very strong Peadar an...Both poems are wonderful and very strong Peadar and it must be a good thing that you can write so honestly and maybe shed some of your load. I hope the darkness soon lightens for you and that a bit of sunshine will enter your life and your soul. Hang on in there - you have more fans and friends than you know and we are all rooting for you.Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06826501916623305535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-75338599656950404772011-04-05T11:55:55.997+01:002011-04-05T11:55:55.997+01:00Parallel Lines seems to inhabit a dream-world not ...Parallel Lines seems to inhabit a dream-world not unlike the one I was stumbling through the other week.<br /><br />Menagerie - great stuff.Dominic Rivronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02618013365521035400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-20672916646423527102011-04-05T11:02:31.366+01:002011-04-05T11:02:31.366+01:00Deep, complicated with a degree of taking the piss...Deep, complicated with a degree of taking the piss at others and self! Always good to be balanced in these things. I liked both, but the second poem is true magic! will be back for another read.Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05912071192179983603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-90412405016463562302011-04-05T09:55:50.126+01:002011-04-05T09:55:50.126+01:00Lucy in the sky with diamonds. Titus?? Never heard...Lucy in the sky with diamonds. Titus?? Never heard of him!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-58550424482527924312011-04-05T09:55:09.365+01:002011-04-05T09:55:09.365+01:00Ha ha!Thanks Mrs Nibbs, how you going cooking da b...Ha ha!Thanks Mrs Nibbs, how you going cooking da babs?Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-72153844897782480772011-04-05T09:53:55.264+01:002011-04-05T09:53:55.264+01:00Thanks Pete. Think I stole that line from Brendan ...Thanks Pete. Think I stole that line from Brendan Behan. He won't mind.<br /><br />And everything,including life, tastes better with a bit of Jam!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-74267053458987547952011-04-05T09:52:03.309+01:002011-04-05T09:52:03.309+01:00Thanklee Titus, great driving.Good luck to Mr T, a...Thanklee Titus, great driving.Good luck to Mr T, and the rest of The A team.<br /><br />'Take your time, hurry up, choice is yours, don't be late.<br />Take a rest, as a friend, as an old memory.'<br /> <br /><br />Ah,they donts writes them like dats no more!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-71047692554887209312011-04-05T09:47:11.685+01:002011-04-05T09:47:11.685+01:00THanks Argent,I am an old sausage,and I'll try...THanks Argent,I am an old sausage,and I'll try to keep one of my chins up!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-61206638004993951462011-04-05T08:32:06.313+01:002011-04-05T08:32:06.313+01:00I'm looking for a Titus animal ode. Am I looki...I'm looking for a Titus animal ode. Am I looking in the wrong place? I clicked Titus's link to this page?Lucy Westenrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12787225228788303013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-9412153920640093292011-04-05T08:14:22.691+01:002011-04-05T08:14:22.691+01:00I remember that zoo poem from its first run out (I...I remember that zoo poem from its first run out (I think).<br />As for Parallel lines, it's pretty engrossing start to finish. If you've only got one well, at least there's plenty in it, and it's plenty deep. If you've only one bucket and there's a hole in it, at least you can sing a song about it.<br />http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z6h4LoMgqlINiamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-30344306130609076012011-04-05T07:48:06.103+01:002011-04-05T07:48:06.103+01:00Love the Bitched, Bollixed, Bewildered line in the...Love the Bitched, Bollixed, Bewildered line in the first one. I'm sure you could turn that into a song.<br />The second one's very clever and works very well. <br />And the Jam too!Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-16770346753632140362011-04-04T22:49:03.292+01:002011-04-04T22:49:03.292+01:00Wear What Thou Wilt Shall Be The Whole Of The Law!...Wear What Thou Wilt Shall Be The Whole Of The Law! <br />Actually, that's Crowley, and he was an old charlatan, so maybe Come As You Are (King Kurt) better.<br /><br />Love the first four lines,<br />'Live within them<br />tumble without them<br />stumble the dire strait<br />The straightened narrow'<br />and then the picking up of the rhyme with 'arrow. And yes, a dark place.<br /><br />But I'm nicking the second for the book.<br /><br />Wishing you light soon, and Mr T is going for an extraction tomorrow. I've told him he has no other option as the last repair job bill was ludicrous, and bankrupting.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8012340126991815859.post-32808024965569257162011-04-04T22:43:57.497+01:002011-04-04T22:43:57.497+01:00I like the rising panic of a new day in your first...I like the rising panic of a new day in your first poem, had that feeling myself! Your second one is delightful, very artfully put together me likes. Chin up old sausage, springs here.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.com